Improving Our
Writing by Adding
Sensory Details
How can we improve our
quality of writing by
making it more
descriptive?
How can we write with
our senses?
•When write with your
senses, you want to
include details and
language that
appeals to the five
senses...
Your five senses
are…
• Taste
• Touch
• Sight
• Smell
• Hear
Writing with Our
Senses
…
Before we begin…
You will have three minutes to write
(silently) what you know about
Valley Forge…
What do we know?
Writing Prompt
Imagine that you are a soldier in the
Continental Army during the
Revolutionary War. You are now spending
a harsh winter at Valley Forge. In the your
writing piece, demonstrate your
knowledge of Valley Forge by describing
your suffering, the suffering around you,
and the deadly conditions at the camp. Be
sure to use descriptive language…
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Revision
• When you revise, you want
to make your writing piece
better by adding vivid verbs,
amazing adjectives,
awesome adverbs,
figurative language, &
sensory details. You could
also add a “hook” to grab
the interest of your reader!
Adjectives
Adverbs
Figurative
Language
Sensory
Details
Hook
Question
Snapshot
Example
Interesting Fact
Valley Forge was a camp site near Pennsylvania that
was utilized during the American Revolutionary
War.
Dialogue
Sound Effect
“Men,” said George Washington, “we can’t give up
now!”
Flashback
It was winter of 1777 in Valley Forge, Pennsylvania
when George Washington and his men endured one
of the harshest winters ever.
Have you ever endured a very difficult event in your
life? Well, the soldiers of the continental army did…
It was winter of 1777 in Valley Forge, Pennsylvania
when George Washington and his men endured one
of the harshest winters ever.
Smack! I heard the sound of another sick, tired
horse plop to the ground as the snow blew over it
like a white blanket.
How can we use buddy editing
to make our writing better?
1. Edit your paper for errors in capitalization,
grammar, punctuation, & spelling.
2. Exchange papers with a partner.
2. Have them read your piece TWICE and rate it.
They will give you…
ONE GLOW: What you thought the writer did well.
ONE GROW: What you though the writer can
improve.
3. Your partner will also sift through your paper to
check for errors in conventions.