Work sample EAL/D: Writing Stage 2 Work sample: Technology Grades are allocated at the end of a unit or semester based on the rank order of students. Grades should not be allocated to individual assessments. Assessment type: Production (written) Performance associated with Grade B, representing high achievement. Work sample summary As a script of a speech on the issue of the effects of technology the writing presents a balanced point of view with a strong sense of audience and purpose. Some inaccuracies are observable in the writing which could cause listeners some confusion. Other inaccuracies such as spelling errors would not detract from the effectiveness of the text as a speech. This written text of a speech was produced in test conditions. Stage 2 Grade descriptions A point of view with sufficient ideas and evidence, including some more complex or abstract ideas, though some irrelevance or repetition may occur; attempts to use personal “voice” where appropriate. Developing control of generic conventions such as essay and paragraph structure and a range of cohesive and linking devices; attempts to evidence a case by citing references and using quotations. Accurate use of a range of simple, compound and complex sentence structures, though less accuracy may be evident in some more complex forms; correct simple forms of punctuation. A range of topic-specific lexical items though inappropriate terms sometimes occur; correct word forms; occasional lapses in appropriate register. 2009/11412v2 PDF: 2009/25367 Grade evidence in work sample The writing, the text for a speech, presents a clear point of view beginning with the title itself. It offers evidence of the advantages of technological development and background knowledge. A clear conclusion is drawn. The material for the text of the speech is carefully shaped to engage the reader (listener), with a provocative and challenging opening, direct address to the audience and the use of first person pronouns, questions to involve the audience, a strongly colloquial style reflecting informal speech patterns and the focus on everyday examples of technology that an audience in a developed society could relate to. Organization of ideas is balanced and clear. Punctuation follows informal speech patterns. The use of grammar is generally accurate and varied though one or two systematic errors occur in formation of questions and the use of countable/uncountable nouns. The vocabulary is topic-specific and conveys ideas with sufficient precision in what can only be a general overview of the topic. The colloquial style works well in the context of an informal speech. Spelling errors are quite noticeable and at times cause confusion, as in ‘our own once’ (for ‘our own ones’). The common expression ‘to hang out’ seems to be intended but is not correctly used. English as an Additional Language/Dialect: Stage 2 Grade B Work Sample 1 Work sample EAL/D: Writing Stage 2 Grades are allocated at the end of a unit or semester based on the rank order of students. Grades should not be allocated to individual assessments. Title conveys main ideas in strong metaphors. Relates well to audience/reader in sustained informal register. Spelling confusion. Thesis, in question form. Uses everyday examples to highlight benefits of technology and to relate to audience. Use of inclusive first person pronouns helps to create a connection with the audience. 2009/11412v2 English as an Additional Language/Dialect: Stage 2 Grade B Work Sample 2 Work sample EAL/D: Writing Stage 2 Grades are allocated at the end of a unit or semester based on the rank order of students. Grades should not be allocated to individual assessments. States position clearly despite language errors. Makes grammatical errors in countable/uncountable forms, verb forms. Spells accurately in general though ‘once’ for ‘ones’ is confusing. Uses natural informal speech forms to engage reader/listener. 2009/11412v2 English as an Additional Language/Dialect: Stage 2 Grade B Work Sample 3